Thursday 19 August 2010

Broken.....

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I am
A broken record
You’ve coaxed out all I have to offer
Played me one too many times


I am
Abused, ruined
Condemned to suffer
Victim of your elaborate crimes


I am
A fallen star
Landed in your gutter
I sparkled once!  Now I’m covered in grime


I am
Your broken record
You’ve pried out what I have to offer...
For the very last time


~Daixy~

6 comments:

  1. HI Daixy.....a reply to ur poem....by now u know who this is...need not identify myself...code name is woot woot..lol
    ...
    MENDED....
    I WAS
    A MENDED RECORD
    YOU COAXED OUT ALL I HAD TO OFFER
    BUT,
    I HAVE BEEN RECORDED OVER
    PLAYED ME ONE TOO MANY TIMES
    GUESS WHAT?
    I DID HAVE A FEW MORE CHIMES
    I WAS
    ABUSED, USED , CONFUSED
    IN RUINS, TREATED LIKE SICK BRUINS
    CONDEMNED TO SUFFER
    LIKE A SICK HEIFER
    BUT,
    RESURRECTED FROM ILLICIT CRIMES
    I AM
    A RISEN STAR
    I HAVE COME THIS FAR
    I STILL SPARKLE, NOW I AM COVERED IN "SIZZLE"
    I AM
    A MENDED RECORD
    I RISE FOR A VERY LAST TIME...
    BY : N.H.O

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  2. Interesting piece. It says something without saying it. I want to say it is the all-too-often story of 'something' but I cannot say it otherwise I destroy the subtlety you so masterfully used/created.

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  3. More power;
    "..You’ve pried out all I have to offer...
    For the very last time"

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  4. Wow... not written in your best of moods, was this? Well, they say our past experiences make us stronger... What say you to hunting the guy down and tell him how we feel about that? ;)

    Morbid, but inspired.

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  5. Gosh where to start....
    @ Nefa. Hush now, you're gonna put my work to shame lol

    @ Nana Yaw, go ahead and destroy it lol. That's what the comments section is for :P

    @ Tetekai, I was thinking about putting that in CAPS. thought it was a bit much though. I changed all to what, in the last stanza. It felt better.

    @ Will, you know my best work is when I'm depressed. Happy me is too hyper and sickly sweet to deal with ;)

    @ Boatemaa, medase. glad you like it :)

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